justira | [Art Draft] One Piece - "Screw Off" (Lucci, Paulie) -- HALP?! Any improvement? Crit please! D=

So, I've got an art-related question. Does anyone remember this drawing of Lucci and hungover Paulie? Well, I liked the idea a lot, but the execution was not that great. I've actually been drawing again this week, thanks in large part to having to get off my ass and try to kick-start

ff_100 again.

Well, I'm trying to redraw the idea. Except, you know. Better. The problem is, I don't know if the new version is better than the old one. Can you guys help me out here?

So here is the old version:

It has a lot of anatomical flaws and, uh, if you actually think about it Lucci seems to be buried in the floor up to his shins or so. I really like the idea and the grumpy, messy atmosphere all the sketchy pencil lines gave this.

And here is the new version:

(Don't mind the unfinished hands, lack of background and Hattori, and, uh, other obviously not-done things >.>)

I tried to make the whole thing a little more interesting by getting rid of the straight profile and head-on shots. I also tried to fix some of the anatomical problems, and have rescued Lucci from the dastardly grip of the floor.

However... it feels like I lost something, too.

Is this any better?

I asked

yaznall when I was home last night and he said that he liked the sketchiness and general feel of the old version better, and I think I agree. I can always make this new one messier (yay, pencil tool!), but I'm not sure if it's worth it. There's also that hangup I have where I feel that I can only nail a given expression once. Did I make enough things better? I think I can recapture the grunge if I try, but I'm not sure that I made the second version better enough to be worth it.

Any thoughts?

Plus, if I abandon this second version I can go draw my new obsession, Kratos from Tales fo Symphonia. Or finish

regann's

ff_100 thank-you-for-entering art. Or draw some Seifer/Zell to lure

bottle_of_shine out of whatever hole she fell in to (where are you?).

... I was going to cleverly add "*is lazy*" after the bit about dropping this makeover project but then I got into my list of OTHER stuff I need to be doing and realized that no, I'm not lazy. It's more along the lines of irretrievably crazy with a side of off-and-on criminal lethargy.

[Art Draft] One Piece - "Screw Off" (Lucci, Paulie) -- HALP?! Any improvement? Crit please! D=

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